I haven’t traveled for years. This summer, my father planned to go to HK with me. I was very excited because I had never been to a place which was so far from Hang Zhou.
27th July, dad took me to get our visas. To finish the forms, we had to take photos. Father said that my hair was too long and it affected my look, so I had a haircut b. In fact, I thought I was uglier after the haircut.
The photography machine was so advanced that the user can take passport photo as soon as the pefore? taking photograph. The photographer just made one click for each person but charges 40 Yuan. It was really expensive!
There were lots of people in the office. Father gave the forms and some photocopies of licenses and photos to an officer. The officer printed several signets? on them and wanted us to pay 140 Yuan for each person. I was nearly fainted upon the desk as I heard it. Traveling is really a waste of money! if u think so, why go travelling?Why does the government charge so much money for granting a visa? I think it wants to earn a large sum of money from it. Well, it may be wrong. yes, you are wrong.
After paying, we received a form. It said that we can get the visa on 17th August. Oh my goodness! It’s a long time to wait! And on 15th August, my military training will begin. I guess that father will force me taking part in the training, so, unfortunately, maybe I’ll visit HK after the training. Damn it!
Father told me that we don’t need to pay any for the plane tickets, because his friends will handle it. I don’t know where the money is from, may be from friends’ pocket. I always have a strange feeling about it.
I feel that HK hasn’t a lot of interesting places, since it has skyscrapers everywhere. Friends tell me that the most interesting thing in HK is shopping. we can buy a lot of things such as clothes and watches at lower prices than in the mainland. I just planned to use my savings to buy an ipod there. Then I will have no money to buy other things. If father supports me with some money, I’ll consider buying some clothes, cards and small ornaments (well, I don’t need art ornaments,they are just for my friends)
Of course, I’ll take many pictures there and then share them with my FOX. I heard that she has never travelled. Her new semester will start on 28th, so I will have to give the photos to her as soon as possible. I hope she’ll like them.
I hope that my journey will be a part of my best memories.
The end.

还有其它错误都一起改了，没用颜色，你自己仔细看吧

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下面是引用小神于2004-08-2 11:46 AM发表的 :

那你座啥？

飞机坐不成只能做火车
那要费我一天的时间
希望这几天表下雨

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下面是引用吥唏罕于2004-08-2 12:18 PM发表的 :

飞机坐不成只能做火车
那要费我一天的时间
希望这几天表下雨

坐火车？我的妈
我死也不要乘

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下面是引用Tigger于2004-08-2 11:54 AM发表的 :
还有其它错误都一起改了，没用颜色，你自己仔细看吧

谢谢老虎

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so I had a haircut b

？？？？

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下面是引用小神于2004-08-2 12:21 PM发表的 :

坐火车？我的妈
我死也不要乘

那有虾米办法
最近老下雨
8知道到时天气如何的

你怕飞机出事？

ugly 的形容词比较级用less or more修饰，而不是改成er；
Friends tell me that the most interesting thing in HK is shopping.本句行为已经发生，应该用过去式，还有些单词用词不是太规范，其他好像没大错误
写的还是不错的说

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下面是引用piggie于2004-08-2 12:34 PM发表的 :
你怕飞机出事？

我不怕
航空公司怕

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下面是引用flyingsky于2004-08-2 1:33 PM发表的 :
ugly 的形容词比较级用less or more修饰，而不是改成er；
Friends tell me that the most interesting thing in HK is shopping.本句行为已经发生，应该用过去式，还有些单词用词不是太规范，其他好像没大错误
写的还是不错的说

我本来是用过去的，老虎给我改了

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下面是引用piggie于2004-08-2 1:40 PM发表的 :

我本来是用过去的，老虎给我改了

小神？

MJ太多~~不是好事~

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下面是引用∑hlb雪影于2004-08-2 2:11 PM发表的 :
MJ太多~~不是好事~

the more mj the more happy

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下面是引用piggie于2004-08-2 2:14 PM发表的 :

the more mj the more happy

the more mj ,the happier perhaps is better